A Letter of Complaint - correction

                                                                                                  45 Sokolov Street,                                                                                                                                      Holon, Israel                                           
                                                                                                   October 2, 2013      

Mrs. Smith

The Manager

"Zara"

POB 69875

Tel Aviv

Dear Mrs. Smith,

Recently I have noticed that your store "Zara" has raised its prices by more than 30%. I am writing this letter because I want your understanding about the price raising(phr.) and (that you) see it through your shoppers' point of view. 

Since you opened your clothing store I was immediately amazed by their low prices, their quality and their style. It was always full of people and everybody went shopping there. But lately the store has increased its prices and because of that I can't find any item which is in my price range. Now going shopping for one or two items of clothes make(gr.) me waste my salary of one or two full days(phr.).

Moreover, I am sure you are aware of the face(ww.) that your style of clothing is made for teens, like me. As a result, most of the teenagers can't afford these prices for clothing, especially when we have to pay for other things by our selves without anybody's help, like (a) driving license. Your choice to raise the prices by more than 30% will probably lead to the leaving(phr.) of many shoppers like me because we can't afford that kind of prices on clothing.

To conclude, I will be glad if you consider my suggestion to lower the prices of the clothes like it used to be. Many teens, including me, will appreciate your consideration and thoughtfulness.

Yours faithfully,

Jane Mayer

This is much better. Well done.
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