post reading activity- correction

post reading activity:

1/10/12

Dear editor of the newspaper(מיותר),

You might be aware of the issue that women don’t really count in society and because of that injustice phenomenon(מיותר), women can't be (as) successful just(מיותר) as men. For that reason, women have to fake their identity and do other tricks just to be as successful as men.

In some cases, women succeed to trick the society and they manage to show the world what they are capable of, without limits from society, and when they succeed to manage their willing(phr.). It makes their days worth while(when) they do the things they like.

But in some cases they can't manage their willing(phr.) and it makes their days worth less then lost, mining(sp.) they didn’t accomplish anything and they couldn’t do what they wished for. - too vague. What exactly do you mean? What is it they want to do and can't? 

To sum up, society should let women do whatever they want and work wherever they want. (New sentence) without(ww.- They shouldn't) being(gr.-be) judge(d) by men and the whole society just for being a women. 

This still needs work.
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Daphna